by John Daleiden
last day of school—
the trash brim full of books
and soiled clothes
the trash brim full of books
and soiled clothes
a half smoked cigarette butt—
lost and found—broken glasses
lost and found—broken glasses
a roadside couch,
home to a flock of sparrows—
supreme decadence
home to a flock of sparrows—
supreme decadence
in Renhai Studio
Archive Id: 199
John Daleiden: USA
Written: December 17, 2009
Theme: Cast off items
Season: Spring
Kigo: sparrows: "suzume": Animals: William J. Higginson, The Haiku Handbook. p. 269.
Verse Form: Free
Process: Forward
Links —>: (see notes)
Notes:
Links:
Verse 2a: half smoked cigarette butt
Verse 2b: lost and found—broken glasses
Verse 1: "school books" and "soiled clothes"
Verse 3: a "couch" abandoned at the roadside
Each verse contains an image of an item that has been used by a consumer and then discarded in a public place with total disregard to other humans. The "cast off" items suggest a level of social disrespect to the environment and other human beings—hence, the title "The Polluters" .
last day of school —
the trash brim full of books
and soiled clothes
4 6 4 = 14
In verse 1 "trash" portrays the notion of things that are "cast off"; some of the "cast off" items might be reclaimed—for example, the books may have been mistakenly placed in the trash, and perhaps the clothes could be laundered or cleaned. But in this case they have been abandoned, left behind for someone else to clean up. The verse suggests inappropriate wastefulness.
a half smoked cigarette butt— (7)
lost and found-broken glasses (7)
In verse 2a the "half smoked cigarette butt", discarded, usually in a public place is unsightly and certainly unsanitary.
Similarly, in verse 2b, the "lost and found" department is very interesting; some of the retrieved items are trashed, yet some are genuinely lost and should be restored to the owner so that they become functional once more. In this Verse 2b setting both items are discards and have become non-functional items left behind by careless persons who disrespect other people. The once useful items are now broken and abandoned.
a roadside couch,
home to a flock of sparrows—
supreme decadence
4 7 6
In verse 3 humans have abandoned a once useful household item—a couch; ironically, the "sparrows" now make it their home, but the broken and out of place item could damage the health of the birds and more importantly it is unsightly. This is a wanton act of environmental disrespect.
John Daleiden: USA
Written: December 17, 2009
Theme: Cast off items
Season: Spring
Kigo: sparrows: "suzume": Animals: William J. Higginson, The Haiku Handbook. p. 269.
Verse Form: Free
Process: Forward
Links —>: (see notes)
Notes:
Links:
Verse 2a: half smoked cigarette butt
Verse 2b: lost and found—broken glasses
Verse 1: "school books" and "soiled clothes"
Verse 3: a "couch" abandoned at the roadside
Each verse contains an image of an item that has been used by a consumer and then discarded in a public place with total disregard to other humans. The "cast off" items suggest a level of social disrespect to the environment and other human beings—hence, the title "The Polluters" .
last day of school —
the trash brim full of books
and soiled clothes
4 6 4 = 14
In verse 1 "trash" portrays the notion of things that are "cast off"; some of the "cast off" items might be reclaimed—for example, the books may have been mistakenly placed in the trash, and perhaps the clothes could be laundered or cleaned. But in this case they have been abandoned, left behind for someone else to clean up. The verse suggests inappropriate wastefulness.
a half smoked cigarette butt— (7)
lost and found-broken glasses (7)
In verse 2a the "half smoked cigarette butt", discarded, usually in a public place is unsightly and certainly unsanitary.
Similarly, in verse 2b, the "lost and found" department is very interesting; some of the retrieved items are trashed, yet some are genuinely lost and should be restored to the owner so that they become functional once more. In this Verse 2b setting both items are discards and have become non-functional items left behind by careless persons who disrespect other people. The once useful items are now broken and abandoned.
a roadside couch,
home to a flock of sparrows—
supreme decadence
4 7 6
In verse 3 humans have abandoned a once useful household item—a couch; ironically, the "sparrows" now make it their home, but the broken and out of place item could damage the health of the birds and more importantly it is unsightly. This is a wanton act of environmental disrespect.
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