Rendering Service: Renhai No. 200

by John Daleiden (jd) & Vaughn Seward (vs)

Hand to bottom—
after ten hours, a new cry
comes to life.       /vs

Waiting for the doctor—       /jd
framed veterinary degree.       /vs

On my jawbone
the vibrations of a drill—
a gold filling       /jd

in Renhai Studio

Archive Id: 200
John Daleiden: USA
Vaughn Seward: Canada
Written: November 29 - December 6, 2009

Theme: Medical Practitioners*; Valuable Items**
Season: All Season
Kigo: n/a
Verse Form: 2-3-2, 3-3, 2-3-2 (Rhythm)
Process: Forward

Links 1/2: Waiting, anticipation (New birth / For doctor).
Links 2/3: Framed (Degree / Tooth being filled).
Links 3/1: Noise (Drill / Crying).

Notes: Theme notes:

*verse 1: Pediatrician; verse 2: Veterinarian; verse 3: Dentist.
**verse 1: Baby; verse 2: Degree; verse 3: Gold.

Note: in the first verse before the 10 hours there is an implication that it was the mother "crying"; afterward it is the baby.

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