Trapped in Loneliness: Renhai No. XXX

by Rita Odeh (ro) and John Daleiden (jd)

the sudden silence
of the caged love bird...
cloudy sky       /ro

a kite trapped in an oak tree—       /jd
the tiny sparrow's song lingers       /ro

at the bistro
she sips wine alone...waiting...
laughter all around       /jd

Archive Id: xxx
John Daleiden: USA
Rita Odeh: Israel
Written: May 7-10, 2012

Theme: Trapped / Entrapment; a secondary and parallel theme of loneliness is associated with the trapped theme.
Season: Spring
Kigo: kite: "tako": Observances: The Haiku Handbook. William J. Higginson with Penny Harter, p. 269.
Verse Form:
Process: Forward: 2A,2B; 1; 3

Links 1 / 2: caged bird / trapped kite; caged bird / free sparrow (b)
Links 2 / 3: kite, bird are alone / the woman is alone
Links 3 / 1: laughter / silence (opposite emotions)

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